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coa//008 rallies the troops

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New readers — welcome! This blog is where I set up feedback threads for the latest draft story in progress. Right now I’m up to story #8. You should probably start at story #1, though.

Current readers — It’s getting serious now, as we fall headfirst into the climax of volume//001. This is the finale of the upcoming Kickstarter’d book. Time for a few revelations and a gathering of our protagonists.

All told, I’ve compressed three weeks of normal updates into two weeks here. That’s just how the scenes happened to break out, but it does mean I have no buffer of prewritten story for next week. I MIGHT end up skipping a week; unsure. We shall see.

Regardless, the Kickstarter is on schedule for launching at the start of March. Get ready.

How’s 008 for ya so far? Anything unclear? Anything you need explained? Everything paced out well? Anything you feel is missing? I can make revisions at this stage.

Comments

  1. Don’t think I’ve brought this up yet, but I’ve always considered Avenged Sevenfold’s “The Beast and the Harlot” to be the theme song of the City of Angles.

  2. combination of chauffer and interrogator
    chauffeur

    Karla Berkowitz and Johnny the Maitre’d
    Maitre d’ (yes, the apostrophe is after the d)

    If it’s a non-euclidian path
    non-Euclidian

    Wouldn’t Kelsey recognize Penelope as sharing the same face as Bedlam? Have they never actually seen each other before?

    • Hm, good point. Generally folks don’t make the connection because Bedlam is visually distorted most of the time but I suspect Kelsey would recognize. I’ll figure out a way to work that into the scene.

      (One possibility is Bedlam already warned her that Dave’s little friend looks like her. I suspect she’d do that, to keep Kelsey from being caught by surprise should Penelope come a-knockin’. But either way I’ll need to note it.)